Revising your draft

Before you turn in your final draft:

1. Replace your old hook with a new hook that you wrote (and have possibly revised) in class.
2. Write a new/updated thesis (last 1-2 sentences of intro paragraph).  Note: perhaps circle the keywords of the quote and essay questions that you answered in order to write your thesis.
3.  Write/check for a topic sentence in every body paragraph.  Basically, IQA.
4.  Add in any transitions that you had added on transitions day.
5.  Rewrite/revise your conclusion.

Waving Your Magic Wand

• Is the title representative of your topic and is it intriguing?
• Is your opening sentence a “grabber” that uses a strong hook?
• Are your opinions credible and backed up with support?
• Have you wordsmithed thoroughly?  Have you chosen the best nouns, verbs, and adjectives?
• Have you varied the length and structure of your sentences and paragraphs?
• Are there sentence fragments and run-ons?
• Have you capitalized all the proper nouns?
• Have you checked all your commonly misspelled words: there/their/they're, your/you're, to/too/two, its/it's, good/well?
• Have you shown more than you’ve told?
• Have you provided sufficient description?
• Have you provided TOO MUCH description?
• Is the finished product something of which you are proud?